Wonderland
A cocunutty aroma wafted through the
island as the sun shone down, beaming and praising the beauty below.
Tranquilly, the birds flitted from tree to tree in the bright, clear sky.
Glistening in the weltering sun, the azure, peaceful water lapped gently on the
smooth, silky sand that glittered a sparkly white. Emerald palm leaves swayed
softly in the cool summer breeze, which whistled in delight. Broad, spiky
leafed trees stood huddled together, in alarm, as still as soldiers. The waves,
as gentle and as meek as a lamb, were able to lull a baby using their cute,
purry voice of a cat. The bright, clear sky was illuminated by the scorching,
red hot sun that was beginning to go down. It was almost too good to be true…
I enjoyed reading your work as you have used a range of powerful range of adjectives. You have also used a a lot of adverbial openers. You just have to vary your sentence structure
ReplyDeleteI liked your use of similes and punctuation.
DeleteGood work Amal! I really like the sentence that you used an ellipsis ' It was almost good to be true'
ReplyDelete* just try to to vary your sentence stucture