Tuesday, 5 March 2013

Bilal's Work 5/3/13


Raging Sea

 

Deep beneath the dark blue sea

The angry king wakes slowly, slowly, slowly!

Tossing and turning his salty hair he awakes

He calls his precious army to prepare a war

 

He begins to below like a hungry lion

Stampeding white horses start to arrive

The king begins to rage in distress

Demands sending out the army to concur the land

 

The sea is like a hungry bull jumping, teaping and charging

Sea gobble up rocks with their canvas mouths spitting them out

The waves terrorise the land splish, splash, splosh

He is a vicious king of the sea

Aggressively the king snaps his sword

Rocks shivering in fear and stands

Boom, crash!

                                                                      

By Bilal Valli

                                                                         

4 comments:

  1. Bilal,your similes are very good

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  2. Excellent use of power of 3 EG: slowy,slowy,slowly.

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  3. Bilal, Your vocabulary was excellent and i liked how u use the power of e E.G slowly,slowly,slowly.

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  4. good work Bilal,you have written a well and really intresting poem your vocabulary was brilliant and i enjoyed reading your poem

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