Deep beneath the dark blue sea
He awakes from his peaceful slumber
Tossing his green sea weed hair .
He strides across the ocean floor .
Gathering his troops
by his side
He begins his long march to the land above.
Waves start to tumble in the floor.
Forward! Forward! He demands!
They mount their wild horses and charge.
He is a ruthless king of the sea.
Restlessly he crushes his mighty sword.
As two worlds collide.
Shivering
in fear the reeds stand tall .
Waves spit out their angry venom.
You hve used brilliant vocab and connectives
ReplyDeleteExcellent piece of work Arjan!I like all your
ReplyDeletethe senteces eg: waves spit out their angry venom.
*You could improve by using more commas rather than full stop.
Nice
-You done a great peice of work
ReplyDelete-Used lots of puctaintion.
-Added lots of vocaburaly.
-You need add more openers