The Land Of Sorrow
Crumbled
homes lay in ruins of the once bustling streets. The bell tower, which was once
singing joyful songs, was now ringing a heart-breaking spell of doom.
Devastation and destruction enveloped the city, destroying every source of
happiness. Happy memories, which people once cherished, now lay shattered on
the streets. An eerie silence encircled the city causing waves of sorrow and
grief. As joyful memories drained away from the city, all that was left was
doom and gloom. As the last known survivor cried mournfully, the last hope of
happiness was destroyed. What joy can be found in this world of doom?
I like the title land of sorrow and your vocabulary. Could you keep your tense consistent?
ReplyDeletei think this piece of writing is excellent. there was lots of descriptive vocab. Also you used some fabulous drop in clauses. i wish you had not repeated gloom.
ReplyDeleteThis peice of work is fantastic!
ReplyDeleteYou used lots of powerfull adjectives.
And many useful vocab.
*i think you could of changed the word doom for something else as you repeat it many times
I like the title `Land Of Sorrows' and your vocabulary. Maybe next time you can keep your tense consistant
ReplyDeleteSorry for repeating that.
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