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Crumbled and
scraped, the once towering building was demolished during the high magnitude
tremor. Clumsily scrambling and stumbling, terrified citizens scurried out of
the streets of devastation as quickly as they could. A hushed rumble was all
that could be heard. Prised possesions were buried under rubble and debris. A howling
from the wind is continuous. Is there going to be another earthquake? Is there
still life around? Is there still hope…?
It is a great piece of writing,There was good verbs and adverbs but you need to add more connectives
ReplyDeleteA great piece of work, lots of connectives and great openers.
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