The Caribbean Island
On the calm, tranquil Caribbean
Island, the long emerald green palm leaves swayed silently in the cool, gentle
summer breeze. As the golden sand glistened in the sunlight, the waves softly
lapped the smooth, silky sand. It was all too good to be true. The beautiful
aroma of the pure coconut milk captivated all who inhaled it. Glittering in the
scorching hot sun, the azure water lay still with the occasional wave kissing
the sand. The sweet, juicy coconuts simultaneously jumped onto the sand as the
cheeky howler monkeys scurry up the rigid palm tree trunk. As it curled over to
shade and protect sun bathing sea turtles, the long palm leaves rustled above
them. Everything was serene, peaceful, and tranquil. But not for long…
I really like your ending as you left me hanging. You varied your punctuation and had a range of powerful adjectives. Just make sure that you use vary your sentence structure.
ReplyDeleteI agree and like your use of vocab and ellipses.
ReplyDeleteI love your writing. your ending left me hanging and you have used elipses correctly.
ReplyDeleteI love your writing you used a good range of vcop and really good description
ReplyDeleteI really like your use of powerful adjectives and your cliffhanger
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