Tuesday, 5 March 2013

Tasneem 5/3/13


                 The Caribbean Island


 

 On the calm, tranquil Caribbean Island, the long emerald green palm leaves swayed silently in the cool, gentle summer breeze. As the golden sand glistened in the sunlight, the waves softly lapped the smooth, silky sand. It was all too good to be true. The beautiful aroma of the pure coconut milk captivated all who inhaled it. Glittering in the scorching hot sun, the azure water lay still with the occasional wave kissing the sand. The sweet, juicy coconuts simultaneously jumped onto the sand as the cheeky howler monkeys scurry up the rigid palm tree trunk. As it curled over to shade and protect sun bathing sea turtles, the long palm leaves rustled above them. Everything was serene, peaceful, and tranquil. But not for long…

 

5 comments:

  1. I really like your ending as you left me hanging. You varied your punctuation and had a range of powerful adjectives. Just make sure that you use vary your sentence structure.

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  2. I agree and like your use of vocab and ellipses.

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  3. I love your writing. your ending left me hanging and you have used elipses correctly.

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  4. I love your writing you used a good range of vcop and really good description

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  5. I really like your use of powerful adjectives and your cliffhanger

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