Tuesday, 12 March 2013

Simran.j 12.03.13


The Monster

 

As I froze, I didn`t know what was going to happen next. Silently, as I crept forward, I suddenly saw a vicious, angry monster staring at me as I was going to do something really bad. Although, I ran, ran, ran, as fast as I could to defeat that spiteful, obnoxious monster. He caught me! Its claws were razor-sharp as I looked with my eyes. Its red-blooded eyes were staring at me as I tried to escape. I ran… finally, finally, finally, I defended that ugly, monster. I escaped!!!         
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8 comments:

  1. Harkamal13 March 2013 at 10:41

    you have a range of punctuation and varing opener well done!

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  2. Ayesha13 March 2013 at 11:51

    I think Simran's work was amazing because you used adjectives and the power of three.

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  3. Kirandeep18 March 2013 at 11:04

    I really liked the fact that you used the power of three. you used openers and puntuation.

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  4. waheed27 March 2013 at 10:30

    i really like that u use power of three lots

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  5. Tania27 March 2013 at 10:31

    I REALLY LIKE YOUR WORF VERY GOOD POWER OF THREE WELL DONE. really good with your VCOP.

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  6. Humaira27 March 2013 at 10:33

    I really like your use of lots of powerful vocabulary and especially your power of three

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  7. bleona27 March 2013 at 10:34

    i really enjoyed your blog
    the things that i really liked were
    *puntuation
    *openers
    *adjectives

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  8. Zaira27 March 2013 at 10:35

    good use of power of 3 and you used a wide range of connectives and puctuation.
    it left me on a cliffhanger, so very well used effect.
    could be improved by varying openers.

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